For starters the I feel the way you write is amazing. If I've never heard of Marvin Gaye, your synopsis would've have informed me on who he was. Just from reading your passage, I know have a sense of how to write more fluently. Might I say that your transitioning were on the button. My only concerns where the few spelling errors. As for The Velvet Undergrounds and Nico your way of describing each character, (as to where I had a visual representation of the member of the band) allows me to give this entry a positive comment.
Jonathan Eng
Jonathan Eng
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